From JMeadows.
Turn to page 123 in your work-in-progress. (If you haven't gotten to page 123 yet, then turn to page 23. If you haven't gotten there yet, then get busy and write page 23.) Count down four sentences and then instead of just the fifth sentence, give us the whole paragraph.
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“The girl on my bed – the girl you saved from a Warg is Penelope Everling! The only member of the the royal family who survived!”
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I'm passing this on to Simon and anyone else who happens to read this.
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I am SO game!
Pg. 123 of Chain and the Sword:
“Let’s take you to the storage shed,” Petre interrupted. “They’ll give you what you need. You’ve certainly shared everything you have with our community the last two days. “If we hurry, there’s dancing in the Great Hall tonight.”
Pg. 23 of Life After Theft:
*Ital.* Gee Mom, it was swell. I met a guy who thinks I’m gay, a girl who thinks I talk to myself, and a professor who thinks I’m on the edge. Oh, and I met a very special girl—she’s dead. And a klepto. And she’s all mine, because I’m the only one who can see her.*End Ital.* “It was fine.”
Sorry about the makeshift Itals. I don't know how to do it for real.:)
Maprilynne
Nice, Maprilynne! I especially liked the Life After Theft excerpt. Very funny.
Let's see here...The whole paragraph is reproduced here. I've made the literary novice's mistake and had my character look into the mirror for his description. Very ten years ago, I know. But hey, it's a first draft.
From Page 23:
“I’ll get some water.” He got out of his chair and took the cup next to her bed and started for the bathroom. He filled up the cup from the sink and caught a glimpse of himself in the mirror. The years had etched themselves in his face as a prisoner marks off time on his cell wall. Brown hair fading to grey, eyes squinting out from under large, bushy eyebrows knit together from decades of use, the beginnings of a double chin he had been meaning to work off. He stared for a bit longer and then turned off the sink and brought her the water.
Simon, Simon, you broke the "looking-in-the-mirror" rule! :-)
Actually, it's a great excerpt. You're a very good writer.
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